Kylie J

Reichieru, I agree that my way of telling this slowed down the storytelling, but it's the only way I could fit what needed to be told. I know this part ...

The beginnings of a story..... He stood outside the carriage, staring at it wonderingly. In his memory, an image floated slowly to his eyes, one where he’s stood, another lifetime ...

Wow I think this poem has a really great idea, how the design booth can mean such different things to people. The main thing that really bothered me was you ...

Mattie I liked it a lot but it could use more descriptions. Right now, it's just actions like you watching the guy dancing with the girl and crying and whatnot, ...

This was really good at conveying your emotions, it felt like the poem really spoke to me. As for a tittle, I think "Messenger of the Darkness" sounds good. I ...

I liked it a lot and I agree with knowing different styles before critiquing them. Anyway, I think the story of the poem is fine. The one problem I found ...

At the moment, I'm listening to Garbage, but Rooney is sitting in my CD player. :)

I'm researching where people were and what they were doing during the attacks for a project. Were you at school, work, asleep? How did you find out about it? What ...

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You may want to add a link to the story itself. For people that don't know, it's in the Other Fiction forum. And yes, I think you should continue it.

It was good, but it left me confused. You jump from idea to idea or introduce completely new things. For example, hollow of the suffering and joy and empty, it’s ...

aah what say you? the second season of 24 "sucked," i believe it was? no way, I thought the second was the best! Actually, it's the third that didn't go ...

Oh yeah, I wrote to DJ MacHale too! You're right, not only do we get replies, but they're personal. I told him I want to be a writer and his ...

I basically agree with Liz and Chevy: the last half is really great, but the beginning isn't too strong. Here are my ideas: To improve the first few stanzas, I ...

Again, I liked this one a lot too. It focuses a lot on dialogue, which is good and helps move the story along well, but it needs more detail. Maybe ...